haiku words: revised : give me some imput and help me make further revisions

Revised haiku:

So this revised haiku will work well, well at least better then the previous

I changed the poem cause i could not think of very many objects.

"a saddening world:

flowers whose sweet blooms must fall...
as we too, alas..."

(first verse)

teardrop
sad
rain
emotion
greif
matter
mineral
earth
everyone
spheare

(2nd Verse) 

flowers
pettles
witherd
falling
sweet
fragrent
blossum

change

seasons

windy

(3rd verse)

comparison
human
forshadowing
death
grave
life
ashs
skeleton
remains
tombstone
simularity